hate this

[messenger]

i freestyled this in my head couldnt quite write as fast as i was thinking, but the perfomce of this is much better than just reading it, what i do vocally with this peice realy does make it very good,



i dont play games, im takking names, as im taking aim,
alot of people fronting but they aint game,
so im hunting, u aint safe im holding a bloody sword,
to persuade u too love me more,
drug u whores with the date rape pills i just scored,
kill cause im bored so kill more but still im bored
knuckles are real soure, the sickest to ever spit it,
killing u ill spiting midgets hitting triple digits,
criple u little thickle bitches, pass my cell phone,
call hell tell them im home, yell alone as i lunghe in,
unhinged and one thing u underestimate, im blessed wit hate,
patient and yes will wait, revenge ? i love waiting,
pretend to be ur friend and then end u by suffocation,
i suffer from obbsessive compulsive dissorder,
aggressive, impulsive, and will slaughter ur daughter,
for no reason, so u aughta walk her as i stalk her or order her to stay in,
im in the the bushes wit a fake grin,
lurking waiting, learned it from saiten,
im sicker than hitler they aint a quicker riddler or sicker spitter, and this is a simpler form of phsycology,
as i try to abolish the unpolished me,
honestly my insanity isnt that bad its me,
mr fuck you, walking tragedy is savagely showing why im the graetest,
so fuck you, hate this,

[sk8zy]

[quote name='messenger' date='26 April 2010 - 05:26 AM' timestamp='1272281210' post='188968']
i freestyled this in my head couldnt quite write as fast as i was thinking, but the perfomce of this is much better than just reading it, what i do vocally with this peice realy does make it very good,



i dont play games, im takking names, as im taking aim,
alot of people fronting but they aint game,
so im hunting, u aint safe im holding a bloody sword,
to persuade u too love me more,
drug u whores with the date rape pills i just scored,
kill cause im bored so kill more but still im bored
knuckles are real soure, the sickest to ever spit it,
killing u ill spiting midgets hitting triple digits,
criple u little thickle bitches, pass my cell phone,
call hell tell them im home, yell alone as i lunghe in,
unhinged and one thing u underestimate, im blessed wit hate,
patient and yes will wait, revenge ? i love waiting,
pretend to be ur friend and then end u by suffocation,
i suffer from obbsessive compulsive dissorder,
aggressive, impulsive, and will slaughter ur daughter,
for no reason, so u aughta walk her as i stalk her or order her to stay in,
im in the the bushes wit a fake grin,
lurking waiting, learned it from saiten,
im sicker than hitler they aint a quicker riddler or sicker spitter, and this is a simpler form of phsycology,
as i try to abolish the unpolished me,
honestly my insanity isnt that bad its me,
mr fuck you, walking tragedy is savagely showing why im the graetest,
so fuck you, hate this,
[/quote]
u got talsent mate u just need to apply ure mind to ure lyrics the substance is good but the flow needs work so my advice is work on ure sillibles learn how to be creative with ure voice and stick to flowing feelings rather than shit u make up the best stuff comes from rewriting and from the heart sk8zy

[messenger]

any feedback is good feedback, this peice was just a bit of freestyle, me fucking about, there wasnt much sense to the lines, just me firing out lyrics, but thanks for the comments