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(Verse: One)
Lured them,
Got an enthusiastic crowd
Feeling that I gotta energetic cloud
Entwinding those diabolical rhymes and
Letting loose the hard times
Droping syllables lemme play with my
lines here comes the adrenaline
After came the epinephrine
Hiding my feelings under the skin
Hiding the shade that's daunting within
Still thinking it's never over
I know you think it's unfortunate
Singing ignoring never listening
Never able to see her glistening
Face again yes I feel regret
But feels I've been pushed of the set.

(Chorusx1)
It's hard to believe you're gone
I thought everything was strong
It's hard to believe we were reunited
It's Hard to believe, hard to believe


(Verse: Two)
I'm just an individual livin' alone
Held a potrait of her ina frame
Your personality, your material body
Your a kinda person I would regret
You deserve better treated
I'll dream that your shadows follow me
You were an entertainer an imitator
Shit, I gotta be compulsive
After all I left being impulsive
That, I wouldn't do 'cause I
Learnt from my mistakes
So I'll fall back and take
A leap of faith again
'Cause no way I can go back
And make the changes change.

(Chorusx1)
It's hard to believe you're gone
I thought everything was strong
It's hard to believe we were reunited
It's Hard to believe, hard to achieve


(Bridgex1)
Never get ahead of yourself,
Never overestimate yourself,
Just think before saying
Never overestimate your words

(Verse: Three)
This is hard for me girl
I'm sending a apology letter
Hoping this'll reach to you
It's speech to the heart
I know we're through but
I just wanted you to know i was cruel
And I could feel the infernal heat
Hit me 'cause I felt guilty
God, I wish you're with another man
Who's treating you right and up tight
That's all I wanted to write
Seeing the skies are bright
I guess we're seeing a clear sight
For the final time
For the final time.

(Chorusx1)
It's hard to believe you're gone
I thought everything was strong
It's hard to believe we were reunited
It's Hard to believe, hard to achieve
The one you truly loved.

(Is this site just for rhyming only? can I put lyrics on here which don't have much rhyme to it?)

Edited by RJS
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You can write anything you like - things don't necessarily have to rhyme. I think I would continue working on the piece above. The sentiment is nice, but the first verse seems too long and the bridges and choruses feel like they need something extra. Just my opinion.

You're a good writer. Practice makes perfect.

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[quote name='DudeAsInCool' date='30 March 2010 - 04:21 PM' timestamp='1269987704' post='188622']
You can write anything you like - things don't necessarily have to rhyme. I think I would continue working on the piece above. The sentiment is nice, but the first verse seems too long and the bridges and choruses feel like they need something extra. Just my opinion.

You're a good writer. Practice makes perfect.
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Thinking the same, I always go back and change the lyrics I just like to post the current lyrics then seeing what people say then I would ask for improvements and here it is :) thanks for your opinion dude.

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