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BLACK LIVES MATTER! ×
BLACK LIVES MATTER!

MY LIFE


YungPhantom_23

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born in 93 the first year of my life/

aint never had a mother to be there by my side/

it was a tragedy the day that my grandma died/

i couldnt except the fact that she was out of my life/

and i will never forget the day they sent my dad away/

its tearin up my family im watchin it fade away/

so i stayed by my bed everynight and prayed/

that my family will reunite one day/

i got hataz in my life tryna make me quit/

they hatin on my talents cuz they aint worth shit/

just take me away from the life i live/

cuz ive lost so much and now have nuthin to give/

take me away to a place where theres no tomorrow/

where theres no harm done and i feel no sorry/

cuz the life that i live keeps me so stressed out/

i been on the wrong path so show me the right route/

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ight.. dats pretty good... keep at it your skill will only get better

what the fuck are you saying this dude just through his life on the table and your gonna say it was "ight". nigga what the fuck is wrong with you that shit rhymed and everything, told a good story, nigga its betta than your shit. enouph said.

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Simple and smooth flowing. I think you have the bones of a really good peace here, I could tell you were passionate about it. I'd like to have seen you complecating the ryhmes more. Can up the suspense and make it more dramatic.

But pretty good.

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ight bro its good but in the 3rd to last line the last word u shoulda put sorrow just fits better bro.. keep it up and ull make it far

oh damn i ain even notice...that was supposed to say sorrow but i just typed it wrong...thats my fault...but thans anyways

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