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Have you ever been so sick in your mind,

that it seems like time, comes to a stop,

like you couldn hear a pin drop,

ya heart stops beatin n ya eyes stop blinkin,

n all this time in ya mind ya cant stop thinkin,

why is this pain bein brought apon me,

i cant find the truth with my eyes i cant see,

with my fingers i cant feel or my teeth chew a meal,

wishin i wasnt twisted smokin weed just to deal,

n sniffin coke just to cope but im broke n i toke,

so im at the end of my rope, life is no joke,

shit happens u cant fix then ur cought up in da mix,

its like trix, ya shit is for the kids,

got my heart racin so hard its brakin threw my ribs,

cause my soul left it n it feels so lonley,

it also seems like the one's close still dont know me,

a g a day just to control me blunts help hold me,

back so i dont try to react, get my head de-tacted,

or just my throat slit been threw so much shit i can hardly sit,

or stand it, the truth i demand it, why u leave my heart branded,

with nothin but pain, sorrows the only chemical in my vein,

or should i say regret n wish i hadnt done it,

takin u back was dumb like a free kick to the stomach.

one time's enough, why did i take u back,. . .

i showed u all my love but then u gave it back,. . .

threw all of our shit, i hope u remember me, . . .

cause u aint nothin to me but a painful ass memory, . . .

god please help me im so confused,

i gave her all my love but i still got used,

when we were together its as if we were fused,

or connected at the hip, hands or my dick to her clit,

im always trippin over the same dumb shit,

the same dumb bitch, or my bitchass,

foolish is the topic please dont miss my class,

tardys are unexpected but im unexceptable,

rejected by the rejected for reason unexcusable,

not stable for a girl, but memories are unescapable,

but more moments without you makes time seem slower,

i hope it doesnt stop n try to roll back over,

that would be the reverse of rebirth,

comin out not younger but older,

not swoller just comin out colder,

n a lil less bolder, i cant believe i told her,

took her back n let her go so now its really over.

one time's enough, why did i take u back,. . .

i showed u all my love but then u gave it back,. . .

threw all of our shit, i hope u remember me, . . .

cause u aint nothin to me but a painful ass memory, . . .

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Sounds like an accurate portrayal of the end of a relationship.

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Pretty decent. I'd like to hear it with some music.

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Sounds like an accurate portrayal of the end of a relationship.

but did u lik? n what would u change

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but did u lik? n what would u change

I did like it. I think structurally, the verses don't sync up properly though: too many lines in the opening, versus the other stanzas. If I were to do any rewriting, I think I would look at some other artist's lyrics, see how they structure their verses, and then try and work something out from there

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I did like it. I think structurally, the verses don't sync up properly though: too many lines in the opening, versus the other stanzas. If I were to do any rewriting, I think I would look at some other artist's lyrics, see how they structure their verses, and then try and work something out from there

thanks. the beat i was usin tho is a lil wack it changes tempo towards the end. but thanks i will rewrite it to different beat.

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