My rap off the top of my head

[juggalo_ninja6648]

If u aint know by now listen cause here it goes/im da mothafuckin pimp and u da hoe/go ahead snitch go call da popo/cause ill just come back click clack and pull the trigga of tha fofo/u lil bitch u aint got shit on a playa/take your faggot ass back to 90210 u fake ass hata/chi-town till i die/step up boy so i can black yo eye and break your jaw/watch ur ass fall like a sack of bricks/better yet like a sack of shit/u pussy u dont know how i roll u just a rookie/u come to my hood and u want out alive/then dude u betta not get out line/cuz i keep dem ak's, uzi's, and 9's/i got da red rag hanginn out da left back pocket/when i roll thru bustin theres no way 2 stop it/i hit anybody and everybody in da buildin/walk out da buildin wit no remorse no hard feelins/make everybody run hide and duck quick/almost how fast as ur bitch jumped on my dick/my clik is real urs is fake/ill hit u so hard youd think its an earthquake/fly like a butterfly sting like a bee/so u betta not try to step to me/fuck ali bitch im da greatest/and u aint shit but the fakest/i got perfect aim ill hit yo ass from a mile away/watch ur brains hang and ur blood drain/my passion is pain, I get satisfaction from splatterin brains/look me in eyes bitch u wont see no fear/angels tappin me on da shoulder sayin my time is near/ya i see my mommas tears/shes hopin i dont serve dem years/but i aint got future aint got no fate/bout da only thang ima get is 25 to life locked in state/but i dont care i be on block bustin of shots/empty the whole clip on ya right in front of the cops/what can i say im ruthless/ill leave u and ur boy toothless/YA DIGG!!! lol

[DudeAsInCool]

5.5 I like a lot of the lines, and your sense of humor, but its a bit too free form, and the message is too self-centered. But you will get better with practice and you should keep at it and see how you grow.