Captain of the Game

[Karamel]

I got flow you can say Im like a river,

When it comes to punchlines believe I will deliver,

Niggas put me on your table I can be your fucking dinner,ha ha

If you got your own pole I could be your personal stripper,lol

The way that nigga hold me up you can say Im like is chain,

And if im spitting in the air you best believe its bout to rain, wow

Im a young chic and I make cash money,

Do your shit girl if you a real hustle bunny, no homo

My game always on a green light I dont stop I always go,

Im rapping so ill and Im only at my intro,

Them haters rapping for years and they shit still dont sound good,

I aint gotta prentend no Im way better than good,

Them haters broke the game but I can be a duct tape,

And when I put it back together best belive im top mate,

Ill treat the game like a ship im the fucking captain,

If you think you bout to rule well thats not happening. yeah

[DudeAsInCool]

It's not bad. I liked the opening lines best:

I got flow you can say Im like a river,

When it comes to punchlines believe I will deliver,

You should add a break/chorus... The best way to learn how to write great lyrics is to learn from the best. Here are some SAMPLES to check out. Look at how they structure their verses and then take what you like to improve your own. Or, take a look at the lyrics of some artist you like...

[Excrement_Cranium]

Good battle fair. And you seem to steer away from the stale-ass norms these days.

7/10