You, you, you

[ChopperX]

I loved you once, I love you still, I always have, I always will..

That’s what I first thought, when I met you

Soon that did change

Though nobody knew

Our love lasted long

We had much fun

But then it went wrong

You started to talk about only one subject:

You, you, you

When you start talking I’d rather have the flu

You, you, you

You tell me everything you do, like you have to

You, you, you

We are through

At the start I thought that you’d come round

But you kept bossing me around

And then I thought: Who do you think you are

Telling me what to do like you’re some kind of superstar

This is how it end

You might comprehend

Now I’m astray

And I think I’m right when I say:

You, you, you

When you start talking I’d rather have the flu

You, you, you

You tell me everything you do

You, you, you

We are through!

We are through...

We are through...

I loved you once, you did fulfill , now you don’t and never will

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I'm not quite sure about the comprehend part. If you think it's bad, could you please give me some advice? ^^

Thanks.

[DudeAsInCool]

When you start talking I’d rather have the stomach flu

This is how it's gonna end

You might just as well pretend

Now I’ve walked away

That I was right to say:

What about the above?

[ChopperX]

Thanks! I think I'm going to use that :)

Anyway, what would you rate my song? ^^

[DudeAsInCool]

Thanks! I think I'm going to use that :)

Anyway, what would you rate my song? ^^

i give it an 8--pretty well written, particularly for the first time out