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[i][font="Comic Sans MS"]No more red eyed late nights Used to see the twilight delights Ready to rise through daylights Time to measure units of time And get ready for a new year Because seasons have pasted And I had my ways, Through the darkest days I Waited patiencely Although I was beaten down Kicked around It was all the same And I took it all for the blame. (Chorus) I took the blame for nothing, Nothing is gunna be the same, Shame I took the blame for nothing, On I go I took the blame for nothing Took for the blame for nothing Took the blame for nothing. She took it all All of what's left of me Vanished with my dignity Then when she goes I felt vanity I was filled with satisfaction Took by one simple action Never knew the word triumph 'Cause what you saw was a Man burying his pride and joy Only to stare in the fresh air I should of been redeemed By a second chance I should of seemed It'll come to this point. (Bridge) Thought you would understand In every way possible Mistakes happen But we shoulda moved on Shoulda moved on. I lost my creativity My mind was imperfection I thought we had a mutual affection She said carelessly mindless words It stung me like an injection Never knew I could be down On the ground in an instant Constantly felt I had an infection A disease that says bye to resurrection I had a predilection for changes of direction And that's why I'm here today Livin' high while my emotions stay away Wishing I'll leap a day to survive Without being betrayed nor displayed An astray full of burnt promises. (Chorusx1) I took the blame for nothing, Nothing is gunna be the same, Shame I took the blame for nothing, On I go I took the blame for nothing Took the blame for nothing Took it all for nothing, nothing (Outro) And so I took the blame Didn't knew she would go But who am I to know I'm not in her shoes Thus I'm unaware of her feelings, feelings, feelings. Thus I'm unaware of her present, present, present.[/font][size="2"][/size][color="#000080"][/color][/i]

[quote name='DudeAsInCool' date='30 March 2010 - 04:21 PM' timestamp='1269987704' post='188622'] You can write anything you like - things don't necessarily have to rhyme. I think I would continue working on the piece above. The sentiment is nice, but the first verse seems too long and the bridges and choruses feel like they need something extra. Just my opinion. You're a good writer. Practice makes perfect. [/quote] Thinking the same, I always go back and change the lyrics I just like to post the current lyrics then seeing what people say then I would ask for improvements and here it is :) thanks for your opinion dude.

[i][/i][font="Comic Sans MS"][/font][size="2"][/size] [color="#000080"][/color] (Verse: One) Lured them, Got an enthusiastic crowd Feeling that I gotta energetic cloud Entwinding those diabolical rhymes and Letting loose the hard times Droping syllables lemme play with my lines here comes the adrenaline After came the epinephrine Hiding my feelings under the skin Hiding the shade that's daunting within Still thinking it's never over I know you think it's unfortunate Singing ignoring never listening Never able to see her glistening Face again yes I feel regret But feels I've been pushed of the set. (Chorusx1) It's hard to believe you're gone I thought everything was strong It's hard to believe we were reunited It's Hard to believe, hard to believe (Verse: Two) I'm just an individual livin' alone Held a potrait of her ina frame Your personality, your material body Your a kinda person I would regret You deserve better treated I'll dream that your shadows follow me You were an entertainer an imitator Shit, I gotta be compulsive After all I left being impulsive That, I wouldn't do 'cause I Learnt from my mistakes So I'll fall back and take A leap of faith again 'Cause no way I can go back And make the changes change. (Chorusx1) It's hard to believe you're gone I thought everything was strong It's hard to believe we were reunited It's Hard to believe, hard to achieve (Bridgex1) Never get ahead of yourself, Never overestimate yourself, Just think before saying Never overestimate your words (Verse: Three) This is hard for me girl I'm sending a apology letter Hoping this'll reach to you It's speech to the heart I know we're through but I just wanted you to know i was cruel And I could feel the infernal heat Hit me 'cause I felt guilty God, I wish you're with another man Who's treating you right and up tight That's all I wanted to write Seeing the skies are bright I guess we're seeing a clear sight For the final time For the final time. (Chorusx1) It's hard to believe you're gone I thought everything was strong It's hard to believe we were reunited It's Hard to believe, hard to achieve The one you truly loved. (Is this site just for rhyming only? can I put lyrics on here which don't have much rhyme to it?)

[i][size="2"]Why am I still here? Day by day I remain alone Night by night sleeping with ghosts unknown And I say to myself, Why am I still here? Every glance Is every breath Every breath is ever closer To a word too deep to even show In which my heart will never glow And I say to myself, Why am I still here? Growing old through years Struggling to hear in my own ears Life starts to daunt in my despair While I wander the lonely roads, Thinking to myself this world isn't fair. And I say to myself, Why am I still here? [center][/center][/size][/i]

Thank you =) This seems like a chill website, might as well see what it's all about :P

Hope so.

[i]I searched on google but can't really find it :/ but description says it all and it'll be appreciated folks :)[/i]

[size="2"][color="#000000"][i][size="4"] Twisted in a nation of pain The pain caused by frustration Everyday locations getting double creations On how to maintain their everyday formation And some-days try to start a conversation Ended up standing with such devastation Shit I have to erase the phrase humiliation But I'm here still trying to exhale the pain And inhaling the feeling of exhilaration. If I could lead the life I want to plead If I would to leave the quiet side of me Thus I would but there would be a fee To commit to my words and release My inner joy. And what I've done to receive Was a man who was once deceived By many people who wasn't respectful And very time they were neglectful As soon as I approached them My deepest inner feelings were lost In which I felt exhausted That my body couldn't function But I got revived by a prayer That's what I've done to receive A second chance to believe I can make changes, changes, changes, And so I thrive forward Never backing down on my dreams I'm seeing things that are new It's true that you can improve Your inner self to the rest And show the world who you really are And trust me you'll go far Only if you put your mind to it But like I said you can walk Before you can run so be careful. I believe we're all here for a reason I believe we can achieve all our goals Thus we all have adventures But it's time to press forward and show our inner joy. To show our inner joy Show our inner joy.[/size][/i][/color][/size]